Kuribons mansion by janna

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6 Responses to Kuribons mansion by janna

  1. gandz says:

    I like the way you tried to add a scary effect, next time try to use some connectives and some description. ZG

  2. colea says:

    good story but next time include the prompt a bit more

  3. nanand says:

    Janna this is a fab story but you haven’t included the prompt!
    Miss A

  4. habej says:

    Thank you guys for sending messages:)
    And I will work on the prompt a little bit more!

  5. hazeeb (janna 's cousin) says:

    Great story janna, keep up the good work.
    You’ve created a picture in my mind clearly!:-)
    Next time in your fabulous stories use adjectives and remember to use semicolons to put two things you want together!

  6. habej says:

    thank you cousin. I really appreciate your message and I will work on the things you said .
    P.S please go on my blog again

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