A great entry in this week’s 100 WC! You have used the prompt carefully and created a story that is full of tension – well done! Keep working hard and enter again.
Mrs N Goulbourne, Team 100, Liverpool, UK
Well done Annais, I think this is an excellent piece of writing. You have added a lot of detail to create tension for the reader, it also creates a picture in my head.
From Sara 🙂
Great work annais! you used a great bunch of adjectives, its just at the end you could of changed ” emmas parents were killed aswell” to something more intresting. but other than that small piece of advice your work is fab!
Annais, that is a great piece of writing. Very spooky, it really caught my attention. It created allot of tension and I want to know what happens next.You have included atmosphere into it. It was brilliant.
Annais, you are a talented writer.
Keep writing! 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
Ratheena♥
Yikes! What a spooky tale. Good use of vocabulary. Keep on writing!
A great entry in this week’s 100 WC! You have used the prompt carefully and created a story that is full of tension – well done! Keep working hard and enter again.
Mrs N Goulbourne, Team 100, Liverpool, UK
Well done Annais, I think this is an excellent piece of writing. You have added a lot of detail to create tension for the reader, it also creates a picture in my head.
From Sara 🙂
Great work annais! you used a great bunch of adjectives, its just at the end you could of changed ” emmas parents were killed aswell” to something more intresting. but other than that small piece of advice your work is fab!
I like what the title is because it sounds adventures well done
Annais, you have grabbed my attention. Well done! You have added a lot of description, to add tension to your writing. Keep it up! By Alima
Annais, that is a great piece of writing. Very spooky, it really caught my attention. It created allot of tension and I want to know what happens next.You have included atmosphere into it. It was brilliant.
Annais, you are a talented writer.
Keep writing! 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
Ratheena♥