Oh my goodness, what a tense ending Surabhi! I want to know what happens next. I really like the way you varied your sentence structures to create effects. Make sure that all your language fits the context.
Miss A
Hi Surabhi – what a fantastic story! I loved it! Your opening sentence hooked me from the start and the excitement and interest just continued to build until the very end! You have dropped in many lures to intrigue the reader and make them want to continue reading – great skills! I agree with the above comment about varying the sentence structures – it really does add to the effect. Keep up the good work!
Hello Surabhi! I really enjoyed your story, and would like to know whose footsteps you heard. I could picture the scene in my own mind and look forward to reading more of your work. Very very well done!!!!!
Oh my goodness, what a tense ending Surabhi! I want to know what happens next. I really like the way you varied your sentence structures to create effects. Make sure that all your language fits the context.
Miss A
Hi Surabhi – what a fantastic story! I loved it! Your opening sentence hooked me from the start and the excitement and interest just continued to build until the very end! You have dropped in many lures to intrigue the reader and make them want to continue reading – great skills! I agree with the above comment about varying the sentence structures – it really does add to the effect. Keep up the good work!
Hello Surabhi! I really enjoyed your story, and would like to know whose footsteps you heard. I could picture the scene in my own mind and look forward to reading more of your work. Very very well done!!!!!
John Pettifer
Chairman of the Board of Governors