Wow Yassine ! What an emotive story! I love the way you used the narrator’s memory and voice to draw me into your story. This is the sign of a talented writer. Next time think about how you could omit information to leave your reader to work things out for themselves and draw them in more.
Keep up the great writing.
Mrs Moore
Hi Yassine,
I really enjoyed reading your story. Well done.
The first sentence really piqued my interest and I immediately wanted to find out more.
And it didn’t disappoint!
Super work this week.
An AMAZING story
an AMAZING STORY
I like your story Yassine.
I liked the parts where he remembers her.
Wow Yassine ! What an emotive story! I love the way you used the narrator’s memory and voice to draw me into your story. This is the sign of a talented writer. Next time think about how you could omit information to leave your reader to work things out for themselves and draw them in more.
Keep up the great writing.
Mrs Moore
Oh! it’s very emotive story. I like the way the word narrator memory.
Hi Yassine,
I really enjoyed reading your story. Well done.
The first sentence really piqued my interest and I immediately wanted to find out more.
And it didn’t disappoint!
Super work this week.
Mrs Boyce (Team 100WC)
Cork.
Ireland
https://mrsboycesclass.100wc.net/
wow amazing work 10/10 for everything