This piece of work is amazing I am speechless and can’t tell you to make it better.
I particularly liked the part liked it when the gang was chasing him down and the constant pain bit.
Wow! What an exciting read this was Brindan! I really liked the way you made careful word choices to create an atmosphere in your writing. Next time don’t forget to check your punctuation and think about how you can use it to create effects.
I liked that you had extreme vocabulary and amazing description.
This piece of work is amazing I am speechless and can’t tell you to make it better.
I particularly liked the part liked it when the gang was chasing him down and the constant pain bit.
Wow! What an exciting read this was Brindan! I really liked the way you made careful word choices to create an atmosphere in your writing. Next time don’t forget to check your punctuation and think about how you can use it to create effects.
Keep up the great work.
Mrs Moore
nice story really kept me wanting to read it