Great use of suspense hear. It would be a good idea to include a variety of punctuation to make it more effective, like semi-colons;, dashes-, brackets() and ellipsis…
Well done Rayyan , you created a great atmosphere with your different sentence lengths and have created a really exciting storyline. I especially liked the part where he shut the door gently as I could really understand why he did that and it told me something about how he felt. Keep working at using devices to draw your reader in and make the feel and think things.
Mrs M
Wow really good use of suspense. What happened next?
I want a part two m8
Interesting, I wonder, if Sam can find a way out.
Great use of suspense hear. It would be a good idea to include a variety of punctuation to make it more effective, like semi-colons;, dashes-, brackets() and ellipsis…
Great use of suspense here. It would also be effective to use a variety of punctuation like semi colons, dashes, brackets and ellipses…
nice✌️
Well done Rayyan , you created a great atmosphere with your different sentence lengths and have created a really exciting storyline. I especially liked the part where he shut the door gently as I could really understand why he did that and it told me something about how he felt. Keep working at using devices to draw your reader in and make the feel and think things.
Mrs M