Hi Raghib,
I can see you’ve made some improvements editing this and it’s less confused. Some lovely word choices; think about if they all fit the context.
I really loved the message of your story, so important right now. Lots of interesting detail but sometimes your word choices didn’t quite fit.
Thanks for sharing.
Karin Poole
Team 100
Virginia Beach
USA
Hi Raghib,
I can see you’ve made some improvements editing this and it’s less confused. Some lovely word choices; think about if they all fit the context.
Mrs Moore
Hi Raghib,
I really loved the message of your story, so important right now. Lots of interesting detail but sometimes your word choices didn’t quite fit.
Thanks for sharing.
Karin Poole
Team 100
Virginia Beach
USA