Hi Zohaib,
Well done on your Team 100WC this week. You have some great ideas in your writing and it’s clear that you have a great imagination. Try very hard to put in full stops at the end of a sentence. They will really help when you’re reading the story back – it makes a lot more sense then! You have great potential though so well done and Merry Christmas to you!
You show lots of flair in your writing, particularly in the creation of names for your characters.
It was a little difficult to make sense of the story at times so I agree with the above comment, have a read through and add some full stops when you know that there is a natural pause.
Keep working hard and your writing will improve week by week.
Hi Zobi,
There’s lots of great humour to your story this week but your lack of punctuation make this difficult to follow; please always check for this before you publish as I know you know how to punctuate, I’ve seen it in your books!
Hi Zohaib,
Well done on your Team 100WC this week. You have some great ideas in your writing and it’s clear that you have a great imagination. Try very hard to put in full stops at the end of a sentence. They will really help when you’re reading the story back – it makes a lot more sense then! You have great potential though so well done and Merry Christmas to you!
You show lots of flair in your writing, particularly in the creation of names for your characters.
It was a little difficult to make sense of the story at times so I agree with the above comment, have a read through and add some full stops when you know that there is a natural pause.
Keep working hard and your writing will improve week by week.
Hi Zobi,
There’s lots of great humour to your story this week but your lack of punctuation make this difficult to follow; please always check for this before you publish as I know you know how to punctuate, I’ve seen it in your books!
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What a funny start to your story Corn Flakes!
Hi Zohaib or Zoby
AWESOME and hilarious writing
BY the epic Krish
great story zohaib you used amazing parts of speech also I watched a movie called santa hunters