Hi Krish – well done for entering this week’s 100WC. I enjoyed reading your writing and I like how you’ve spoken directly to the reader in it but I don’t think you’ve managed to include all of the 5 prompt words have you? I can’t see ‘opened’, ‘strange’ or ‘nervous’, next time try and include them all 🙂
Hi Krish, I can see that you worked hard to explain things to your reader, remember to use planning to help you structure your ideas clearly and make sure you include all the things that you need to.
Miss A
Hi Krish – well done for entering this week’s 100WC. I enjoyed reading your writing and I like how you’ve spoken directly to the reader in it but I don’t think you’ve managed to include all of the 5 prompt words have you? I can’t see ‘opened’, ‘strange’ or ‘nervous’, next time try and include them all 🙂
Hi Krish, I can see that you worked hard to explain things to your reader, remember to use planning to help you structure your ideas clearly and make sure you include all the things that you need to.
Miss A
Good work Krish!!
I enjoyed the story a lot. Mainly the adjectives
well done krish
your story was amazing you used descriptive writing. But next time try to finish your story and complete the 5 words.