Well Done Ratheena! I really like how you have used descriptive language to create tension and mood. I also like your use of commas. It is a very good piece of writing! From Sara 🙂
Great work Ratheena! It’s very eye-catching reading the story, it makes you want to read it over and over again! I like how you described the weather and what was going on that night.
Fantastic work!
Noha.
This is a really nice story I’m. Inpresed by your work and it’s really using capital letters and full stops and I’m so surprise I think you might get a 5c for this work.
By Tyler Mead Primry School
Well Done Ratheena! I really like how you have used descriptive language to create tension and mood. I also like your use of commas. It is a very good piece of writing! From Sara 🙂
Great work Ratheena! It’s very eye-catching reading the story, it makes you want to read it over and over again! I like how you described the weather and what was going on that night.
Fantastic work!
Noha.
What a spooky story! You moved me to the edge, I was so taken by surprise! I love the way you set the scene, it was great! Carry on writing,
~Imani~
This is a really nice story I’m. Inpresed by your work and it’s really using capital letters and full stops and I’m so surprise I think you might get a 5c for this work.
By Tyler Mead Primry School