I like your heading, very striking. I also liked your heavy font. The story itself is full of description and I want to know what happened just before the change. Why was someone stealing credit cards and who changed into a lego figure? Why wasn’t the thief changed instead?
Perhaps when your main character screamed, this could perhaps have been a new paragraph, with the scream in speech marks.
I loved the description of the log. I have seen many logs that were smelly and damp!
Well done.
Hello Jayanna
I like your heading, very striking. I also liked your heavy font. The story itself is full of description and I want to know what happened just before the change. Why was someone stealing credit cards and who changed into a lego figure? Why wasn’t the thief changed instead?
Perhaps when your main character screamed, this could perhaps have been a new paragraph, with the scream in speech marks.
I loved the description of the log. I have seen many logs that were smelly and damp!
Well done.
Sent from Grantham, Lincolnshire.