Hi Zohaib,
You have written an interesting story with your hundred words this week and I am intrigued to find out what happened next! I am impressed with how you managed to set a scene, describe the character and tell the story in such a limited number of words!
You have included some interesting descriptive words and phrases such as ‘insolent’ to describe the Lego figure. Check the ‘He loved Lego…’ sentence to see where you need to add a connective or punctuation, and just check for sense in this sentence.
I look forward to reading future posts!
Mrs Ward
KOBPS Lincolnshire
Hi Zohaib,
You have written an interesting story with your hundred words this week and I am intrigued to find out what happened next! I am impressed with how you managed to set a scene, describe the character and tell the story in such a limited number of words!
You have included some interesting descriptive words and phrases such as ‘insolent’ to describe the Lego figure. Check the ‘He loved Lego…’ sentence to see where you need to add a connective or punctuation, and just check for sense in this sentence.
I look forward to reading future posts!
Mrs Ward
KOBPS Lincolnshire