Zahra, that is really amazing! I like how you used lots of description
Thankyou
Zahra, that is really cool! Maybe more punctuation.
Thanks… ok
Well done Zahra, great detail to draw in your reader into your character. Careful you stick to the 3rd person and don’t include personal pronouns. I can’t wait to Find out what happens next. Mrs M
Thankyou Miss
next time i will switch to 3rd person
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Zahra, that is really amazing! I like how you used lots of description
Thankyou
Zahra, that is really cool! Maybe more punctuation.
Thanks… ok
Well done Zahra, great detail to draw in your reader into your character. Careful you stick to the 3rd person and don’t include personal pronouns. I can’t wait to
Find out what happens next.
Mrs M
Thankyou Miss
next time i will switch to 3rd person