I really like your story Jinan. Maby next time use a bit more similies and metephores
its really good jinan next time add in more full stops
I like how your story was connected to other myths. To improve you could say more how she looks like.
Jinan this is very descriptive I can really imagine your charter well done maybe you can put in some more similes
thank u, Maleeha. I really liked your story aswell. 🙂
Well done Jinan, you gave us great background detail to help your reader understand your character. Try to vary the way you start your sentences. Mrs M
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I liked how you used my character
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I really like your story Jinan. Maby next time use a bit more similies and metephores
its really good jinan next time add in more full stops
I like how your story was connected to other myths.
To improve you could say more how she looks like.
Jinan this is very descriptive I can really imagine your charter well done maybe you can put in some more similes
thank u, Maleeha. I really liked your story aswell.
🙂
Well done Jinan, you gave us great background detail to help your reader understand your character.
Try to vary the way you start your sentences.
Mrs M
😀
I liked how you used my character