Great stuff Hafsa! I loved the way that you used detail to tell your reader all about your mythological heroine and told us about her past so we could make up our minds about her. Next time remember to read it back and add in missing commas.
Mrs M
star: Hafsa i really liked how you done illiteration(limbless lucifer) and you described how the god orphues looked like but…….
Wish: Next time in your 2nd sentence try not to use the same word (weapons) and maybe you couldve used some similies, metaphors, and personification but well done nt
Great stuff Hafsa! I loved the way that you used detail to tell your reader all about your mythological heroine and told us about her past so we could make up our minds about her. Next time remember to read it back and add in missing commas.
Mrs M
THANK YOU MRS MOORE!!!
I WILL TRY AND WORK ON IT
star: Hafsa i really liked how you done illiteration(limbless lucifer) and you described how the god orphues looked like but…….
Wish: Next time in your 2nd sentence try not to use the same word (weapons) and maybe you couldve used some similies, metaphors, and personification but well done nt
OKAY I WILL TRY