A very detailed introduction! I like how you added detail about Scarlet’s background including her Mum and Dad. Maybe you could add in more description about her physical features to help us really picture her.
Well done Mia, I really enjoyed reading this introduction to your mythological heroine, you made good use of background detail to influence my opinion of your character; a sign of a talented writer!
Next time remember to check for missing commas.
Happy writing
Mrs M
A very detailed introduction! I like how you added detail about Scarlet’s background including her Mum and Dad. Maybe you could add in more description about her physical features to help us really picture her.
Can’t wait to read more!
Miss Kaur
Well done Mia, I really enjoyed reading this introduction to your mythological heroine, you made good use of background detail to influence my opinion of your character; a sign of a talented writer!
Next time remember to check for missing commas.
Happy writing
Mrs M
Wow! Scarlet sounds like an interesting character ; strong and fearless. I wonder what will happen to her in your story.
I like the way you have described your charter next time you can add some more similes .