Lovely introduction! You have included lots of information about Shade, keep an eye out for your tenses. When you write the next piece think about interesting sentence starters.
Well done Zahrah, I really like the way you included lots of familiar detail to place your heroine firmly in the world of mythology. I can’t wait to find out what happens to her.
Next time try to start your sentences in different ways.
Mrs M
Lovely introduction! You have included lots of information about Shade, keep an eye out for your tenses. When you write the next piece think about interesting sentence starters.
Keep it up.
Miss Kaur
Well done Zahrah, I really like the way you included lots of familiar detail to place your heroine firmly in the world of mythology. I can’t wait to find out what happens to her.
Next time try to start your sentences in different ways.
Mrs M
good story maybe you can improve on your past tenses