Frostbor

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6 Responses to Frostbor

  1. tavah says:

    wish: He made a species called icewings could be more interesting e.g He created a new species called the icewings
    🙂 The description is extremely interesting e.g His jaws can crush anything’s body whether it is scaly or furry
    🙂 I like the extra description that makes the entire piece of writing more interesting

  2. ahmes1 says:

    I like your work but maybe you could add more description. 🙂

  3. ahmes1 says:

    I like your work but maybe you could add more description.

  4. nanand says:

    Hi Rakeen,
    This is an awesome piece of writing, I really like the way that you used detail to influence my opinion of your character. Next time think about how your organise your ideas

  5. Felixstine says:

    Frost are sounds terrifying. Try and keep to language which supports this image. Something being” handy” is too casual.

  6. Felixstine says:

    Should read Frostbar

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