I love the vary of adjectives and sentence starters, tell us why he did these things
Hi Jervarne, You have created quite a fearsome beast and used detail to firmly place him in the world of myths and legends. Keep things simple so as not to confuse your reader. Mrs M
Bloodstream has more than two halves. Mathematically this is confusing. I like the idea of crossover from light to dark. Why is he always so hungry?
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I love the vary of adjectives and sentence starters, tell us why he did these things
Hi Jervarne,
You have created quite a fearsome beast and used detail to firmly place him in the world of myths and legends. Keep things simple so as not to confuse your reader.
Mrs M
Bloodstream has more than two halves. Mathematically this is confusing. I like the idea of crossover from light to dark. Why is he always so hungry?