I love this, it has a really good story line! Maybe next time you could use different sentence starters. But otherwise I loved it! It’s such a good idea!
Well done Gia, another great piece of writing, you used detail well to create a firm impression of your baddy in your reader’s mind; I especially like the way you included information that made your reader almost feel a little sorry for him, a sign of a talented writer.
Next time try to vary your sentences starters.
Mrs M
What a sad tale. Is your demon truly indestructible? Mr Blue seems to have had a very big impact on his existence. I can see from the comments that you understand how important proof reading is.
Gia it was good, but you wrote some things one more time, maybe check over your work and read it carefully! 😉
Thank you Amelie. I know about the mistakes since all of my work got muddled up
I love this, it has a really good story line! Maybe next time you could use different sentence starters. But otherwise I loved it! It’s such a good idea!
I keep that in mind
Gia I liked how you have described the charter however maybe you can add some ajectives.over all I have really enjoyed this.
Thank you
Hi Gia,
This sounds like a start of a very romantic but SCARY story. I would be interested to see if the demon finds Mr Blue…
We’ll done.
Daddy x
Thank you very much daddy
Well done Gia, another great piece of writing, you used detail well to create a firm impression of your baddy in your reader’s mind; I especially like the way you included information that made your reader almost feel a little sorry for him, a sign of a talented writer.
Next time try to vary your sentences starters.
Mrs M
What a sad tale. Is your demon truly indestructible? Mr Blue seems to have had a very big impact on his existence. I can see from the comments that you understand how important proof reading is.
thank you I will keep that in mind