Oh my Zareenah, this is quite a fearsome beast! I like the way you used background information to make her so interesting for your reader. Next time proof read before you publish to see your tenses are all in the past.
Mrs M
What a horrible creature. Eating children and being snake like are descriptions that I find very scary. I wonder how such a dumb creature would survive. She must have many enemies who would like to destroy her.
You really created a picture in my head
try to add more description to describe Snakita
I liked where you wrote:
‘she was as strong as two thousand men but was as dumb as a patato’
Oh my Zareenah, this is quite a fearsome beast! I like the way you used background information to make her so interesting for your reader. Next time proof read before you publish to see your tenses are all in the past.
Mrs M
What a horrible creature. Eating children and being snake like are descriptions that I find very scary. I wonder how such a dumb creature would survive. She must have many enemies who would like to destroy her.