Zahra I loved the way you ended this, it really left me wanting to find out more! You also made greate use of precise detail to create a clear picture in my mind of your character and influence my opinion on just how disgusting they are; this is the sign of a talented writer! Next time try remember to check your punctuation before you publish.
Mrs M
What a brilliant word putrid is. It really describes this horrible monster. I think blowing down the whole sea is a bit more than making mischief though.
great maybe put a bit more description in your work! 😉
Great work Zahra!
I’ll avoid snorkelling in this sea!
Mum x
Zahra I loved the way you ended this, it really left me wanting to find out more! You also made greate use of precise detail to create a clear picture in my mind of your character and influence my opinion on just how disgusting they are; this is the sign of a talented writer! Next time try remember to check your punctuation before you publish.
Mrs M
What a brilliant word putrid is. It really describes this horrible monster. I think blowing down the whole sea is a bit more than making mischief though.