Well done Kayshap, you really created quite a ferocious demon through your careful word choice and used detail to place your character carefully in the world of myths and legends. Next time think about how you are paragraphing.
Well done
Mrs M
What a detailed piece of writing! I can really picture what Menace look’s like, although he sounds extremely dangerous I wouldn’t want to ever come across your demon. Next time think about the layout of your piece of writing.
Well done Kayshap, you really created quite a ferocious demon through your careful word choice and used detail to place your character carefully in the world of myths and legends. Next time think about how you are paragraphing.
Well done
Mrs M
Menace sounds terrifying. Is he from another planet? I would like to know how he can destroy the hardest material in the whole universe.
What a detailed piece of writing! I can really picture what Menace look’s like, although he sounds extremely dangerous I wouldn’t want to ever come across your demon. Next time think about the layout of your piece of writing.
Keep it up,
Miss Kaur