Leon you have created a brilliant mythological anti-hero and made great use of detail, connecting him to other stories to help your reader firmly place your character in the world of myths and legends.
Next time remember to check your punctuation before you publish.
Keep it up!
Mrs M
I’m pleased that Flybo can’t leave the underworld. Our planet doesn’t need anyone who can use thunder and lightening against us. Remember people with names are important enough to have capital letters when you write about them.
Wow Leon! I wouldn’t want to come across Flybo, he sounds extremely vicious! Remember to read through your work before you publish it to check for punctuation errors.
Leon you have created a brilliant mythological anti-hero and made great use of detail, connecting him to other stories to help your reader firmly place your character in the world of myths and legends.
Next time remember to check your punctuation before you publish.
Keep it up!
Mrs M
I’m pleased that Flybo can’t leave the underworld. Our planet doesn’t need anyone who can use thunder and lightening against us. Remember people with names are important enough to have capital letters when you write about them.
Wow Leon! I wouldn’t want to come across Flybo, he sounds extremely vicious! Remember to read through your work before you publish it to check for punctuation errors.
Looking forward to reading more,
Miss Kaur