The toughest challenge yet

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6 Responses to The toughest challenge yet

  1. beguh1 says:

    stars: I really like your descriptive writing because it has a lot of adjectives and good describing
    You used good punctuation like ellipses for suspense

    wish: you could maybe use different sentence starters

  2. dhang says:

    I really liked how you connected your story to the one that we are reading in class. to improve maybe use a myyt

  3. nanand says:

    Hi Zahra,
    Wow! What an incredible opening to your myth! You used detail well to influence my opinion and make me care about what happens next. As you continue, try to think about varying starters and structures .
    Can’t wait to read on!
    Mrs M

  4. English Advisor says:

    Hello there,
    Alisha sounds like a formidable heroine for your reader; make sure all the detail you include fits a myth, I’m not sure the UK is a mythical setting- could you change this?
    Keep it up
    English Advisor

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