Hi Roha,
I enjoyed reading this, you made your setting seem very appealing and your heroines through your use of interesting detail. Next time make time to proof-read before you publish as you missed some punctuation.
Can’t wait to read on
Mrs M
Hi there,
What a great setting you have created, I would love to spend my holidays there, it sounds great! And what interesting heroines. You have missed some punctuation, reading your work back will help you to spot these mistakes.
Keep it up.
English Advisor
Manchester
I really liked it, you created a picture in my head.
try to add more commas.
Hi Roha,
I enjoyed reading this, you made your setting seem very appealing and your heroines through your use of interesting detail. Next time make time to proof-read before you publish as you missed some punctuation.
Can’t wait to read on
Mrs M
Hi there,
What a great setting you have created, I would love to spend my holidays there, it sounds great! And what interesting heroines. You have missed some punctuation, reading your work back will help you to spot these mistakes.
Keep it up.
English Advisor
Manchester