Hi Iva,
I really like the way you introduced your heroine to your reader and included detail that makes me care about her and influences my opinion. As you continue, try not to rush it, so you don’t make errors.
Looking forward to finding out about Evie
Mrs M
Hello there,
What an appealing heroine you have created in Evie; I really loved the little detail you included, like the fact she slept on a cloud. Careful you don’t rush the story line or mix past and present.
Can’t wait to read on.
English Advisor
Manchester
hope u enjoy my story sorry about the mistakes :))
hope u enjoy my story sorry about the silly mistakes I made :))
Hi Iva,
I really like the way you introduced your heroine to your reader and included detail that makes me care about her and influences my opinion. As you continue, try not to rush it, so you don’t make errors.
Looking forward to finding out about Evie
Mrs M
Hello there,
What an appealing heroine you have created in Evie; I really loved the little detail you included, like the fact she slept on a cloud. Careful you don’t rush the story line or mix past and present.
Can’t wait to read on.
English Advisor
Manchester
thank you everyone 😀