Nice work Zareenah. I loved your description.
But I did see that there were some lower case letters where they should’ve been capitals. Other than that AWESOME!! 🙂 😀
Oh my Zareenah, what a great way to start your story! I love the way you used detail to help me picture things in my mind and influence my opinion. Next time think about missing commas when you want your reader to pause.
Can’t wait to find out about what happens to Any.
Mrs M
Hi there,
What an interesting setting you have created in Aria and what an intriguing character in Amy; I have a feeling things are about to change for her. Making sure you check for missing punctuation will make your writing easier to follow.
Keep up the great work.
English Advisor
Manchester
Nice work Zareenah. I loved your description.
But I did see that there were some lower case letters where they should’ve been capitals. Other than that AWESOME!! 🙂 😀
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Oh my Zareenah, what a great way to start your story! I love the way you used detail to help me picture things in my mind and influence my opinion. Next time think about missing commas when you want your reader to pause.
Can’t wait to find out about what happens to Any.
Mrs M
Hi there,
What an interesting setting you have created in Aria and what an intriguing character in Amy; I have a feeling things are about to change for her. Making sure you check for missing punctuation will make your writing easier to follow.
Keep up the great work.
English Advisor
Manchester