Wow Sampriti! What a great way to start your myth and draw your reader into your story. I especially like the way you used detail to influence my opinion and place your story firmly in the world of myths. As you continue try to include more of your senses . Can’t wait to find out what happens to Swifter.
Mrs M
Hello there,
I was bowled over by this piece of writing. What a fabulous setting for your story and what an interesting heroine to take things forward. You really used descriptive language well to draw me into your tale. Try to use more punctuation to guide your reader more.
Keep up the great work.
English Advisor
Manchester
Wow Sampriti! What a great way to start your myth and draw your reader into your story. I especially like the way you used detail to influence my opinion and place your story firmly in the world of myths. As you continue try to include more of your senses . Can’t wait to find out what happens to Swifter.
Mrs M
Hello there,
I was bowled over by this piece of writing. What a fabulous setting for your story and what an interesting heroine to take things forward. You really used descriptive language well to draw me into your tale. Try to use more punctuation to guide your reader more.
Keep up the great work.
English Advisor
Manchester
thank you