Hi Leon,
I really enjoyed reading this, you used some really interesting detail to draw me into your story and make me want to know what happens next. Remember using capitals, full stops and commas will make your story easier to read as your reader will know when to pause.
Looking forward to hearing about your brave knight.
Mrs M
Hi there,
Wow! What an interesting character Reptile is and what a great setting. I really feel involved in your story already through your use of detail. Taking care of your spelling and punctuation will help your reader to follow your story more easily, keep a dictionary with you when you write.
English Advisor
Manchester
Hi Leon,
I really enjoyed reading this, you used some really interesting detail to draw me into your story and make me want to know what happens next. Remember using capitals, full stops and commas will make your story easier to read as your reader will know when to pause.
Looking forward to hearing about your brave knight.
Mrs M
Hi there,
Wow! What an interesting character Reptile is and what a great setting. I really feel involved in your story already through your use of detail. Taking care of your spelling and punctuation will help your reader to follow your story more easily, keep a dictionary with you when you write.
English Advisor
Manchester