Arojania

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3 Responses to Arojania

  1. nanand says:

    Hi Arojan,
    I really enjoyed reading this! You made some great use of description to draw me into your story and influence your opinion. As you continue, remember to proof- read to check your punctuation, I can see some missing, and remember to change paragraphs when you need to.
    Looking forward to hearing about Shadow’s adventures
    Mrs M

  2. English Advisor says:

    Hello there,
    What an interesting setting and hero you have created for your reader through your clever use of language. I agree with the above comment, this looks it should be 3 paragraphs; can you see where they each start? Hope Shadow comes out victorious.
    English Advisor
    Manchester

  3. Damian Moon says:

    An enjoyable introduction and straight away brings the reader into the story. By introducing the evil character into the story you immediately set the tone for the tale.

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