Hi Amelie,
You have made your setting sound like a really lovely place and made it clear that Amy will be your heroine. Next time remember to check that all your verbs are in the past. Also, remember to start a new paragraph when you change the topic.
Looking forward to hearing about the dangers of the night.
Mrs M
Hi there,
Amy sounds like she has had a tough life, I do hope that things improve for her. I agree with the advice you have been given; always make time to check that your verbs are all in the correct tense and you aren’t jumping between the past and present.
English Advisor
Manchester
Hi Amelie,
You have made your setting sound like a really lovely place and made it clear that Amy will be your heroine. Next time remember to check that all your verbs are in the past. Also, remember to start a new paragraph when you change the topic.
Looking forward to hearing about the dangers of the night.
Mrs M
I will check my verbs in the past
Hi there,
Amy sounds like she has had a tough life, I do hope that things improve for her. I agree with the advice you have been given; always make time to check that your verbs are all in the correct tense and you aren’t jumping between the past and present.
English Advisor
Manchester
I will check my work every time I write