Wow Rehana! Lots of exciting background detail to help you reader understand the setting . Now I want to know more about Demira and what happens next. Remember to check your spelling before publishing.
Mrs M
Hello there,
That sounds like quite a punishment for anyone who dares to go against the gods! Lots of fab descriptive language here too. Remember to check your capital letters, I think you may have forgotten some.
Keep it up
English Advisor
Manchester
Wow Rehana! Lots of exciting background detail to help you reader understand the setting . Now I want to know more about Demira and what happens next. Remember to check your spelling before publishing.
Mrs M
Hello there,
That sounds like quite a punishment for anyone who dares to go against the gods! Lots of fab descriptive language here too. Remember to check your capital letters, I think you may have forgotten some.
Keep it up
English Advisor
Manchester
thank you for your comment I really appreciate it and I will put capital letters next time 🙂
Its really good description, I can imagine it in my head