Hi Micah,
You used some great detail to make your hero appealing to your reader and place your character firmly in the world of myths. Next time remember to check all your verbs are in the past.
Looking forward to reading about Blazzer
Mrs M
Hello there,
Blazzer sounds like an interesting character, the background detail of what happened to his mother make me hope he gets to defeat his enemy. Could you give me a little more information about the setting to help me picture things in my mind?
Keep it up.
English Advisor
Manchester
Hi Micah,
You used some great detail to make your hero appealing to your reader and place your character firmly in the world of myths. Next time remember to check all your verbs are in the past.
Looking forward to reading about Blazzer
Mrs M
Hello there,
Blazzer sounds like an interesting character, the background detail of what happened to his mother make me hope he gets to defeat his enemy. Could you give me a little more information about the setting to help me picture things in my mind?
Keep it up.
English Advisor
Manchester
thank you for your look
Interesting opening and you skilfully make the main protagonists sound like real swash buckling heroes!
I think you should say more about you7r character and his enimie but good effort