Hi Zahrah,
This is a great piece of writing, I really like the way you described the idyllic setting and then signposted that things were about to change. Remember to use capitals for place names.
I can’t wait to hear what happens next.
Mrs M
Hello,
Zahrania sounds like a wonderful place I would like to visit and I never realised that Hercules had all those children, I wonder what is causing all that trouble at night. Which character will you focus on in your story?
I hope I get to read some more
Hi Zahrah,
This is a great piece of writing, I really like the way you described the idyllic setting and then signposted that things were about to change. Remember to use capitals for place names.
I can’t wait to hear what happens next.
Mrs M
Hello,
Zahrania sounds like a wonderful place I would like to visit and I never realised that Hercules had all those children, I wonder what is causing all that trouble at night. Which character will you focus on in your story?
I hope I get to read some more
An interesting introduction to what sound like a really intriguing tale. This piece of writing makes me want to know what happens next?