Hi Zaynab,
What a fabulous myth full of descriptive writing to keep your reader gripped; you really created some exciting characters. Next time remember to check your tenses are all in the past before you publish.
I can see signs of a talented writer here.
Keep it up!
Mrs M
I enjoyed the imagery in the story, I could really picture the setting and characters.
I found the sentence “Little did she know..” an interesting starter. An idea, maybe you could start another tale with this teaser. Where would the story take you?
Hi Zaynab,
What a fabulous myth full of descriptive writing to keep your reader gripped; you really created some exciting characters. Next time remember to check your tenses are all in the past before you publish.
I can see signs of a talented writer here.
Keep it up!
Mrs M
I enjoyed the imagery in the story, I could really picture the setting and characters.
I found the sentence “Little did she know..” an interesting starter. An idea, maybe you could start another tale with this teaser. Where would the story take you?
What a lovely read! Really enjoyed reading it. A few errors but nothing that can’t be corrected. You are in good hands, take tips and listen to Mrs M.