Oh my Rehana, what a wonderful piece of writing! You used the narrators voice to great effect to make me feel empathy with your character and care about what happens next. Remember to read your work back and add in commas when you pause.
I really enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
Oh my Rehana, what a wonderful piece of writing! You used the narrators voice to great effect to make me feel empathy with your character and care about what happens next. Remember to read your work back and add in commas when you pause.
I really enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M