I like the mature and variety of adjectives and vocabulary you used
next time read through your work and spot the vocab and synonym mistakes
other than that good work:)
Siraja, I think you have done really good work! I think I spotted a few mistakes. Once I read it, I wanted to comment. But I was scrolling and scrolling down. What is all that space?
WOW that was amazing
I don’t know what you need to improve!!!!
I like the way his eyes are a greyish coluer but make sure you check your spelling
GOOD USE OF WORDS 🙂
TRY TO CHECK YOUR SPELLINGS
I like the mature and variety of adjectives and vocabulary you used
next time read through your work and spot the vocab and synonym mistakes
other than that good work:)
I like how you did a question at the end
wow that was amazing, I liked how you described him well
to improve maybe you can read over your work and add some more similes.
Siraja, I think you have done really good work! I think I spotted a few mistakes. Once I read it, I wanted to comment. But I was scrolling and scrolling down. What is all that space?