the mysterious man

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5 Responses to the mysterious man

  1. mushk says:

    I love the adjectives you used and also the vocab
    next time make your work longer
    other than that amazing 🙂

  2. bhuiz says:

    you made him sound really mysterious I really like it.
    you could use more commas

  3. Faria says:

    Love what you have written so far…. A good start so far. Like the combination of the sentences put together both short and long.

  4. Asim says:

    He who shall not be named….sounds a bit like Voldemort. I like it! ‘Villainous foe’ superbly said!

  5. nanand says:

    Oh my Zaynab, what a wonderful way to bring in your baddy! I love the way you used detail to influence my opinion of him. Try to vary your starters.
    Mrs M

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