I love the adjectives you used and also the vocab next time make your work longer other than that amazing 🙂
you made him sound really mysterious I really like it. you could use more commas
Love what you have written so far…. A good start so far. Like the combination of the sentences put together both short and long.
He who shall not be named….sounds a bit like Voldemort. I like it! ‘Villainous foe’ superbly said!
Oh my Zaynab, what a wonderful way to bring in your baddy! I love the way you used detail to influence my opinion of him. Try to vary your starters. Mrs M
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I love the adjectives you used and also the vocab
next time make your work longer
other than that amazing 🙂
you made him sound really mysterious I really like it.
you could use more commas
Love what you have written so far…. A good start so far. Like the combination of the sentences put together both short and long.
He who shall not be named….sounds a bit like Voldemort. I like it! ‘Villainous foe’ superbly said!
Oh my Zaynab, what a wonderful way to bring in your baddy! I love the way you used detail to influence my opinion of him. Try to vary your starters.
Mrs M