Hi Maleeha, You’ve moved events on well using thought. Try to vary phrases and sentence starters to keep it interesting. Mrs M
Hi Mrs Moore yeah will do just need to think more about what am going to do with that but overall thanks for the feed back and need to do the same for my writing in English.
well done this is a very good piece of work
wow that blew my mind rreally good description:D:D
thanks for all the comments and I will do the same for English I think it helps better anyway if I work with you Mrs Moore
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Hi Maleeha,
You’ve moved events on well using thought. Try to vary phrases and sentence starters to keep it interesting.
Mrs M
Hi Mrs Moore
yeah will do just need to think more about what am going to do with that but overall thanks for the feed back
and need to do the same for my writing in English.
well done this is a very good piece of work
wow that blew my mind rreally good description:D:D
thanks for all the comments and I will do the same for English I think it helps better anyway if I work with you Mrs Moore