Hi girls,
What wonderful use of description to move the story on and influence my opinion. Next time think about how you could vary sentence structures to create effects.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
I like how you used adjectives!
I like how you called her the queen of cold!
She replied she was as cold as a wintery night but she got the ocean blanket!
Hi girls,
What wonderful use of description to move the story on and influence my opinion. Next time think about how you could vary sentence structures to create effects.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
HAFSA GREAT WORK I LOVE HOW YOU USED DIFFERENT ADJECTIVES TO DESCRIBE THE CHARACTERS I ALSO LIKED HOW YOU TALKED ABOUT HOW THE PRINCESS FELT
Yasin hafsa’s cousin
Very well written Zahrah. Good use of adjectives. Good descriptive writing.
Thanks for the comments. Next time I will try and use more sentence starters.
Thank you for the comments. Next time I will try and use more better sentence starters.
I like how you used adjectives!
I like how you called her the queen of cold!
She replied she was as cold as a wintery night but she got the ocean blanket!
I like the way you used different colours, and
you used descriptive words that people don’t use I really liked it.