Hi Zaynab
This is a great way to move the story on; I love all your description and use of thought.
Think about how you could vary punctuation to control your reader.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
Wow Zaynab!
What an intriguing piece of writing!
I love your use of various punctuations such as commas, exclamation marks, question marks and speech marks.
The metaphor and adjectives you have used throughout your writing really draws the reader in so keep it up and very well done!
Very impressive Zaynab, brilliantly used descriptive words, which kept me guessing throughout! I want to find out what happens to the princess, so get blogging!
Hi Zaynab
This is a great way to move the story on; I love all your description and use of thought.
Think about how you could vary punctuation to control your reader.
I enjoyed reading this.
Mrs M
thank you
Interesting read, Zaynab. Would love to know what happens next…
thanks
Wow Zaynab!
What an intriguing piece of writing!
I love your use of various punctuations such as commas, exclamation marks, question marks and speech marks.
The metaphor and adjectives you have used throughout your writing really draws the reader in so keep it up and very well done!
thank you
Very impressive Zaynab, kept me on the edge. I want to read on and find out what happens to the princess, so get blogging!
Well done!
Very impressive Zaynab, brilliantly used descriptive words, which kept me guessing throughout! I want to find out what happens to the princess, so get blogging!
Well done again!
thank you