THE OCEAN BLANKET BY AMAN ALI 5B

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4 Responses to THE OCEAN BLANKET BY AMAN ALI 5B

  1. gilaz says:

    ;p : great description

    ;p : good use of suspence

    X : grammar

  2. nanand says:

    Hi Aman,
    I like the way you referred to previous events to move events on.
    Always make time to edit before you publish and check your spelling.
    Mrs M

  3. khanm says:

    You should have done more work!
    There should have been more full stops!
    I really liked your last sentence!

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