Wow! This is a good piece of writing well done! 🙂 but check your spellings and as miss anand said in her comment, try to vary your sentence openers!
Straight away when I read the first sentence I knew something was missing. it was this, The princess was looking clueless at the man , that dosent make sense but clulessley does. 😀
Hi Safaa
You have used some interesting description here but you need to vary your sentence starters; this is a target for you
Mrs M
Wow! This is a good piece of writing well done! 🙂 but check your spellings and as miss anand said in her comment, try to vary your sentence openers!
This is a really good piece of work but you are telling the story try to be a bit creative in your writing but otherwise well done!
wow this is a very good piece of work but when you did a simile you missed out the word as
Wow thanks for the lovely comments, next time I will include your advice.:)
Straight away when I read the first sentence I knew something was missing. it was this, The princess was looking clueless at the man , that dosent make sense but clulessley does. 😀