This is great, it reminded me of “The Subtle Knife” by Phillip Pullman. Before publishing make sure you give your tale one last proof read as their was a part in the middle that was slightly confusing, “They both picked it up with a screw on the floor. The sound of a ted to silver fiercely.” I look forward to reading your next story.
You have to get all your words in the right place.
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This is great, it reminded me of “The Subtle Knife” by Phillip Pullman. Before publishing make sure you give your tale one last proof read as their was a part in the middle that was slightly confusing, “They both picked it up with a screw on the floor. The sound of a ted to silver fiercely.” I look forward to reading your next story.