I think that it is a good piece of work, and you have put a lot of effort into it you could improve it by adding some semi-colons and some alliterations.
This is a brilliant tale, it made me think of many horror films I like to watch. This is written in a real 1970’s/80’s horror movie style. One issue, the font made it really hard to read, your writing is excellent and does not need the fancy styling to make it better, if anything it was a slight barrier to me reading it. I look forward to reading your next tale.
Thank you . I am so very sorry for the hand writing affect , I will have a another post of world war one posted by me and Ratheena . By Anjali
Love to her from you soon
The story is amazing and very scary and I like it when you added that dramatic end to your story Anjali! Yeah, I could not read it properly because of the font
I think that it is a good piece of work, and you have put a lot of effort into it you could improve it by adding some semi-colons and some alliterations.
From Sara
This is a brilliant tale, it made me think of many horror films I like to watch. This is written in a real 1970’s/80’s horror movie style. One issue, the font made it really hard to read, your writing is excellent and does not need the fancy styling to make it better, if anything it was a slight barrier to me reading it. I look forward to reading your next tale.
Thank you . I am so very sorry for the hand writing affect , I will have a another post of world war one posted by me and Ratheena . By Anjali
Love to her from you soon
I have changed the font
The story is amazing and very scary and I like it when you added that dramatic end to your story Anjali! Yeah, I could not read it properly because of the font
Well Done Anjali! You have a very descriptive paragraph with lots of fantastic vocabulary.
well done Anjali.
but you don’t need fancy writing because I couldn’t really read it propaly . but other than that your work is spot on. from sophia