Wow Zayanab your work was really awesome! I’ll give you a star: Good punctuation ; good adjectives! Wish: more similes, metaphors and personification
I like how it ended because it says no think after it
I love the way in this story you have used descriptions about what the child sees, hears and feels, using sensory descriptions is a great way to engage the reader. I look forward to your next story.
I like your story it is good but to improve it you can add some semi-colons. From Sara
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Wow Zayanab your work was really awesome! I’ll give you a star: Good punctuation ; good adjectives!
Wish: more similes, metaphors and personification
I like how it ended because it says no think after it
I love the way in this story you have used descriptions about what the child sees, hears and feels, using sensory descriptions is a great way to engage the reader. I look forward to your next story.
I like your story it is good but to improve it you can add some semi-colons.
From Sara