I like the way you started this tale, setting it in a real life place where people made and watched scary movies, I enjoyed the build up of suspense as Tom left his house for some fresh air, but, for me,the ending needed to be more scary. I was expecting to see the Giant Grizzly Bear from the film, there in real life! I still enjoyed the tale and think it was well written and I look forward to your next story.
I liked it , it was spooky , but you could of changed the end.
I like it because it is very spooky
I like the way you started this tale, setting it in a real life place where people made and watched scary movies, I enjoyed the build up of suspense as Tom left his house for some fresh air, but, for me,the ending needed to be more scary. I was expecting to see the Giant Grizzly Bear from the film, there in real life! I still enjoyed the tale and think it was well written and I look forward to your next story.
thank you I like it that you gave me some advice, I’ll make sure it will have some more suspense next time.
I loved this malaika it was really good you should feel proud of yourself!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!