This is a very scary tale with some very dramatic events and descriptions, such as, “She nodded; her journey began with a gulp of fear inside her.” In trying to engage the reader, don’t lose track of the plot or stop focusing on the quality of each sentence. With only 100 words each one needs to be of high quality. I look forward to your next tale.
amazing story you should be greatful
This is a very scary tale with some very dramatic events and descriptions, such as, “She nodded; her journey began with a gulp of fear inside her.” In trying to engage the reader, don’t lose track of the plot or stop focusing on the quality of each sentence. With only 100 words each one needs to be of high quality. I look forward to your next tale.
Hi Sir/madam
thank you for a lovely comment now I know that I can improve on my story
I like it instead of not scared of anything you can write frightened, terrified, petrified, afraid, worried etc
wow that was super scary but good you have included lots of punctuation I really liked it a lot you could add a bit more words