This is great, I especially like this part: “When they entered they started to hear some creepy sounds drifting through the air, then the lights blew away; a loud roar blew them out like candles. When they looked up, they saw a moving one-eyed-doll with a blade, as it shivered, they screamed and tried open the door but it’s no use,” I look forward to reading your next tale.
yo Irina, you written the word ‘VILLAGE’ a lot and also you were told to split them in two paragraphs.
James that is really good just add more adjectives other than that it is awesome!
nice work you added a lot of description
This is great, I especially like this part: “When they entered they started to hear some creepy sounds drifting through the air, then the lights blew away; a loud roar blew them out like candles. When they looked up, they saw a moving one-eyed-doll with a blade, as it shivered, they screamed and tried open the door but it’s no use,” I look forward to reading your next tale.
well thank you sir or madam, I can’t wait until you read my next one